Cleopatra Poem by Marieta Maglas

Hi Marieta, You started so well......too short, you could really make this great, remember how she was used by Ceaser, then cast aside by Mark Anthony.....the venomous snakes were the men in her life.....you have a good style but if you sit back and think of the great nation of Egypt and all the pressure on her, you could really make this a tragic poem, you have the skill to do it...why not? I only gave you a 4 this time.....but await you to resubmit or penn a new one? A challenge from me to you.......

hmmm, nice short but well said

a famous queen of Egypt ... Hello Mari a nice poem..and compact.. indeed a good write.. for this 10+ .

A lifetime story of this beauty in a lifetime of tenacity

Very short poem, but totally accurate. love it

i appreciate your view. kindly read my poem Cleopatra's glory. shan

Yeah it’s true…but Beauty of Cleo…undoubtedly non venomous in eyes of beauty admirers … 10 not for venom…but for beauty of dear Cleo Ms. Nivedita UK

Really wonderful poem...I like this very much..

Hi Marieta, 'Cleopatra' works well as haiku. I like the gold and asp references because they are two images at opposite ends tugging with each other. Cleopatra still has that animal magnetism that attracts writers and readers. I'm wondering if you're going to keep playing and experimenting with haiku.

Wow! short but killing.