Cleopatra Poem by Marieta Maglas


Rating: 4.8

Under the mask of gold,
I see only venomous snakes
Poisoning her name forever....

Fergus Condron 20 November 2009

Hi Marieta, You started so well......too short, you could really make this great, remember how she was used by Ceaser, then cast aside by Mark Anthony.....the venomous snakes were the men in her have a good style but if you sit back and think of the great nation of Egypt and all the pressure on her, you could really make this a tragic poem, you have the skill to do it...why not? I only gave you a 4 this time.....but await you to resubmit or penn a new one? A challenge from me to you.......

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Eyan Desir 10 November 2009

hmmm, nice short but well said

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Ramin Chaman 07 November 2009

a famous queen of Egypt ... Hello Mari a nice poem..and compact.. indeed a good write.. for this 10+ .

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Roy Martinez 30 October 2009

A lifetime story of this beauty in a lifetime of tenacity

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Margaret Donaghy 30 October 2009

Very short poem, but totally accurate. love it

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Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar 09 January 2010

i appreciate your view. kindly read my poem Cleopatra's glory. shan

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 07 January 2010

Yeah it’s true…but Beauty of Cleo…undoubtedly non venomous in eyes of beauty admirers … 10 not for venom…but for beauty of dear Cleo Ms. Nivedita UK

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Braja K Sarkar 29 December 2009

Really wonderful poem...I like this very much..

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Bob Genevro 08 December 2009

Hi Marieta, 'Cleopatra' works well as haiku. I like the gold and asp references because they are two images at opposite ends tugging with each other. Cleopatra still has that animal magnetism that attracts writers and readers. I'm wondering if you're going to keep playing and experimenting with haiku.

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Rahul Aithal 07 December 2009

Wow! short but killing.

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Marieta Maglas

Marieta Maglas

Radauti, Judet Suceava, Romania
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