At the centre of a viscous net
The sly spider waited alert
A fly flitted closer on buzzing wings
Was caught in the labyrinthine strings
Alas, wound round in ductile rings
A very descriptive and poetic piece on this aspect of nature. A 10
Well done. In a few lines we find great meaning. Thank you for sharing.
It is a true fact nowadays.. People are deceptive and lost the basic values that made us human beings.. There are some of these little spiders with their net awaiting everywhere.. Thank you Valsa ma'am.. The metaphor is really apt to single out such horrible human beings.. They are as creepy as spiders.
The fiber that spider produces is considered high strength material. Scientists are fascinated by it. Poor fly has no chance at all. Beautiful five liner.
At the centre of a viscous net The sly spider waited alert, all set A fly flitted closer on buzzing wings Was caught in the labyrinthine strings Alas, wound round in ductile rings p.s. re your topics: i see no deceit in the poem. didn't the fly read the " No Trespassing" sign? ? ? bri :)
v-girl, you left a LOVELY space at the end of line 2 for adding ‘my two cents’: ...." , all set" it makes a nice curve along right edge of poem and gives a rhyme to the line. no need to thank me for pointing out this OBVIOUS improvement. to MyPoemList (as is) . ;)))))) bri :)
Hunting of flies by a spider nicely described and I understood it. But is it a metaphor, how the weaker men are trapped by stronger men in a society? Valsa George knows better.
A wonderful succinct write that carries a strong message about deception. Animals like human beings create schemes, ways or means to ensure survival. A spider weaves a web to entrap its.prey. A great piece well executed.10
Spider is cunning and wily. Its net is syrupy and vicid. Any insect caught in this net can't get out easily. So also deceptive people entangle innocent people into their viscose plans. Dear madam, you have astutely depicted this metaphorical poem on a philosophical base. Your five liner reveals universal truth. Beautiful poem with lofty insight.10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Sometimes life is cruel, it catches one unawares just like this spider. The circle of life moves on, what benefits one is the loss of another. Very beautifully written five liners showing the shades of life.10+++