Waiting Poem by Kranthi Pothineni


Rating: 5.0

Ocean is still and calm
Breeze is cool and warm
Sun is bathing in charm
I sat down gazing it long
To hear my beats song

Sun glowed after its bath
Water too glittered like gold
Waves danced in grace
I sat down admiring that phase
While lighting a smile on face

Clouds came and passed
Sky dressed the ocean skin
Dark shades sailed into sand
I sat down cheering its reach
Like fulfilling a deepest wish

Sun moved away from blue
Slowly its fire too got dull
So it went to rest in peace
I still sat until its too dark
Waiting for morning to break

Janell Cressman 30 October 2009

stunning! ! ! ! ! ! ! beautiful imagry, loved it! ! ! ! ! ! (10 from me :))

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Rajaram Ramachandran 31 October 2009

Waiting for the sunset is well narrated here.

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 31 October 2009

Waiting for the sunset and the morning simultaneously is an interesting phenomenon, Kranthi.

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Eyan Desir 31 October 2009

Indeed your trademark.. this kinds of poem Well done 10s...

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Joseph Poewhit 31 October 2009

Paints a lonely picture

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 03 March 2010

A fabulous nature you presented in imagery galore… 10+ Ms. Nivedita UK

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rago rago 03 November 2009

flowing down like a pure stream your words are scintilating.......very nice presentation and crafted till end..............

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Antonio Liao 03 November 2009

like Lilies that float in the hyacinth of sweeten honey; tasteless lips touches the garrison of wonderful flowers......Lotus comes in my beautiful reality...such a lovely poem with a heart...Thank you and God bless....a 10 +++

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Marieta Maglas 02 November 2009

nice simile, well embedded into this poem between two visual metaphors, which are used to personify two elements of the nature : ''Sun glowed after its bath Water too glittered like gold Waves danced in grace'' wonderful descriptive poem about the nature, lovely to read....10++++++++

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Anju Addanki 01 November 2009

A nice poem where everyone goes through it at one point of time.

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