Corey Threet

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Domestic Abuse (C) 8-12-07

Poem by Corey Threet

Thrown to the floor punched, slapped, and bruised
Give me all your stuff is another way to be abused
Being verbally raped with the words that will never be forgiven
Smacked in the face so much you just want to stop livin
Talked to like a lowly child and to him or her you serve
You wish you could just break away this is not what you deserve
You think the days of slavery is over but you're living it today
Then when they're down you they try to kiss you but you push away
But that was a bad move now you're about to get a beaten
Now it's like your dreams of a great marriage has been devoured and eaten
He talks to very unkindly she laughs at you in your face
He hits at you she spits at you and you want to leave that place
The ragin beast has been unleashed and again let loose
If this is what you undergo you're a victim of Domestic abuse
But cheer up everything will be ok and you don't need a gun
All it takes is to press the emergency numbers 911


Comments about Domestic Abuse (C) 8-12-07 by Corey Threet

  • Angel OfGod (12/11/2009 6:41:00 PM)

    Your description of Domestic Violence was very thorough and concise. I'm glad you included both sex as well. However the ending was more a platitude or triviality than a useful suggestion. Codependents who are trapped in what is called the Cycle of Violence are as bound to that lifestyle as a dope addict.911 is rarely a way out. Very good subject and content though. Thanks for the invite.(Report)Reply

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  • Ashley Stone (7/6/2009 12:17:00 AM)

    All I have to say is Brillant! ! ! ! ! !(Report)Reply

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  • Andrew Matthews (6/21/2009 7:00:00 PM)

    Hello,

    I really thought this poem was a great one, very well observed and great skill with the rhyming and rythym.

    A great poem about an awful side of life, and gives great advice at the end.

    kind regards

    andrew m(Report)Reply

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  • Wilma Horne (5/11/2009 8:31:00 AM)

    Very powerfully written. This should make us aware of what sometimes really goes on behind closed doors. Keep writing. <3(Report)Reply

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  • Hailey Agnew (4/29/2009 6:25:00 PM)

    not too bad, i liked it. your poems really flow, they're powerful.(Report)Reply

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  • Sally Plumb Plumb (4/25/2009 4:50:00 AM)

    Hi! This is an upsetting piece. Try my piece 'Domestic'. Take care.(Report)Reply

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  • Isabella Genova (4/24/2009 7:25:00 AM)

    That was amazing ans very powerful! I like this poem a lot.(Report)Reply

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  • Sandra MartyresSandra Martyres (4/23/2009 11:24:00 PM)

    This poem is an eye-opener and sends out a powerful message...The 911 reminder is a fitting finale to a great piece...10++ from me Corey(Report)Reply

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  • SAM Mitsuki (4/14/2009 9:49:00 PM)

    A great poem, great flow, and a tight ending. Its great.(Report)Reply

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  • Tamra Craft (4/10/2009 11:47:00 PM)

    Great poem, it has a great flow to it. and a great message too!(Report)Reply

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  • Barry A. LanierBarry A. Lanier (4/10/2009 8:17:00 PM)

    Loving this 911 advice and a fitting termination to the poem...wish I had thought of that in my poem 'Rape & Revenge'(Report)Reply

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  • Annie Collins (4/8/2009 6:04:00 PM)

    brill peom its the best ive read by a long shot well done keep up the good work love that u keep it real(Report)Reply

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  • Myrtle ThomasMyrtle Thomas (4/8/2009 5:42:00 PM)

    Cory, you did excellent on this sad write, with a lot of imagery and emotion.I added one yesterday called (Our Children Are Dying)(Report)Reply

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  • Londiwe Buthelezi (4/1/2009 1:48:00 AM)

    i hate it when children are exposed to situations like this...children are meant to be loved and thats all...really good poem, corey(Report)Reply

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  • Shekhar JoshiShekhar Joshi (3/8/2009 3:42:00 PM)

    you wrote it well that too on a worthy subject
    rhyme schemme is good too
    good work(Report)Reply

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  • Serap Biyikli (2/27/2009 7:56:00 AM)

    Amazing! Your poems are good.(Report)Reply

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  • Reshma Ramesh (2/26/2009 10:34:00 AM)

    sad but happening........well the advice is right...on one should stand abuse...well penned(Report)Reply

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  • M A (2/26/2009 9:59:00 AM)

    this poem has great rhythm. its very well written.(Report)Reply

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  • Barry A. LanierBarry A. Lanier (2/21/2009 1:44:00 PM)

    Enjoyed your public statement on abuse particularly the advice call 911(Report)Reply

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  • Reshma Ramesh (10/19/2008 5:34:00 PM)

    you are brave...........keep writing! !(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, August 12, 2007

Poem Edited: Monday, March 28, 2011