Patricia Gale

A Maiden's Surrender

My beloved I would fall upon the sword of love for thee
I would surrender my holdings just to have you near
Looking into your eyes I am lost in a sea of magic blue
My heart has taken control and I no longer wish to fight
Oh that thou would see the enchantment you have cast upon this maiden
Your lips form my name and all is silent but thine words

In the midnight hour my soul tosses like a ship lost upon the ocean
My longing for you grows deeper er’ day
The beauty that thou brings into this maiden’s life
Is that of spring upon the mountain’s side
Forever does the essence of love linger in my heart
You the sweet honeysuckle I the ivy entwined in the forest green
My beloved how my soul wishes to flow with thine
To be one with you till my final breath

Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 19, 2007
Poem Edited: Wednesday, February 16, 2011

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  • Ivor Hogg (4/15/2008 7:07:00 PM)

    Defintely a romantics poetry M'Lady

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  • James Foulk (8/7/2007 4:00:00 PM)

    a great piece of poetry patricia+

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  • Lorena Walker (6/25/2007 3:09:00 PM)

    Another great one. I love the line, 'Your lips form my name and all is silent but thine words.'

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  • Paul ButtersPaul Butters (5/12/2007 7:45:00 AM)

    I trust a good knight (English UK spelling!) was had by all! Lovely stuff.

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  • Michael Fischer (5/1/2007 11:19:00 PM)

    A very heartfelt and moving piece! Great stuff Patricia! Top marks!
    -Michael

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  • Ivor Hogg (4/28/2007 5:49:00 AM)

    Defintely one of the romantics m 'Lady A group to which I am proud to belong
    The archaic language adds to the pleasure

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  • Michael Gale (4/24/2007 3:57:00 PM)

    Romantic writing is definitely your forte Patricia. Congrats on another tenner.
    I'll try in the near future to try and stay outta the heated sun.
    God bless all cool poets-MJG.

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  • Original Unknown Girl (4/23/2007 5:37:00 AM)

    Patricia, it's as if you have a direct portal to my mind, the parts that even I try to escape from! (LOL!) You write romance so very well and I know these feelings deeply, this poem resonates for all of those reasons! Oh yes, meant to say, beautiful piece of poetry, I hope he hears your call..... HG: -) xx

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  • Theodora Onken (4/22/2007 12:46:00 PM)

    What a most cherished and beautiful Love Sonnet! You've done it again, by golly, by garsh!
    Blessings, sweet one, Theo

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  • Jim Foulk (4/20/2007 1:10:00 PM)

    when it comes to romantic poetry you really do your thing, and write great ones.

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  • Lance Carthen (4/20/2007 11:05:00 AM)

    This one did pull some romantic chords of miss and lost love. I enjoyed your poem.

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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjrFrank James Ryan Jr...fjr (4/20/2007 3:47:00 AM)

    Inervating work, Princess Patricia...AND HOW YOU KNOW HOW TO PULL THOSE CHORDS OF ROMANCE!

    fjr

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