Ahmad Shiddiqi

Rookie - 6 Points (March 7,1974 / Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia)

A Piece Of Ice - Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

I walk through snowy avenue
nobody there, just a glance of you
darling, when you realize what I am
to your life and to your freedom

I stop under corner lamps
they twinkle like Summer stars
darling, when you really miss me
into your love, I beg a chance's key

I stare at shadowy branches
they sway like ballerina's dances
darling, where you put your hope
suddenly I can't pull destiny's rope

I smile to eerie ravens
nothing else matters
darling, where you bury bravery
surprisingly I can't erase memory

to you I just a piece of ice
I melt in front of river's eyes
to you I just a piece of ice
I thaw under mountain's flames

to you, I just a piece of ice
I plunge inside sea breeze
to you, I just a piece of ice
I drown into dawn skies

(dedicated to a great poet at poemhunter, Merna Ibrahim)


Comments about A Piece Of Ice by Ahmad Shiddiqi

  • Bharati Nayak (12/3/2016 11:43:00 PM)


    A great writing! ! A true lover always feel humbled at the greatness and beauty of the beloved. His heart is riddled with doubt whether his feelings reach to the heart of his love.
    The poem flows so beautifully- - - - - Congratulations for being Poet of the Day! !
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  • Rajnish Manga (12/3/2016 10:16:00 PM)


    The poem is a great tribute to a notable fellow poet and portrays her hallowed influence. It also merges nature with the poet's feelings quite beautifully. Thanks & Congrats- POTD.
    to you I just a piece of ice
    I thaw under mountain's flames
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  • Seamus O' Brian (12/3/2016 2:13:00 PM)


    Just a piece of ice in your eyes, darling. What a terrifically haunting metaphor for looking into the eyes of the desired, and finding nothing but apathy; certainly one of the most distressing human experiences this life offers.

    You have captured that magnificently in these last 2 stanzas, dear poet. Bravo, indeed. I pray peace and grace into your journey, my friend, you and all the PH family, as we wander together down the lonely streets of snowy avenue.
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  • Christina Simmons (12/3/2016 11:17:00 AM)

    A Piece Of Ice:
    What a great way to look upon a whole, human being as an object: a hollow vessel that can easily be controlled, Just mere water: one click of the finger and all the bruising, ill feelings of treacherous circumstances could easily disappear without a second thought, instead of sticking like glue on our psyche. Well written, dear poet. (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (12/3/2016 8:04:00 AM)


    A wonderful poem, congrats, a very good selection as members poem of the day. (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (12/3/2016 2:37:00 AM)

    A Piece Of Ice
    Snowy avenue! Life and nature. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report) Reply

  • B.m. Biswas (12/3/2016 2:25:00 AM)

    imageryc.f.
    replete with imagery......

    metaphors with ice rierv....lover beloved.....GREAT....noticeable...

    congratulations..potd.....

    thanks.
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  • Kim Barney (12/3/2016 2:25:00 AM)


    Congratulations on poem of the day! Well done! (Report) Reply

  • Bernard F. Asuncion (12/3/2016 2:05:00 AM)


    I stop under corner lamps
    they twinkle like Summer stars
    darling, when you really miss me
    into your love, I beg a chance's key

    Nice poem... Congrats on being selected......
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  • Electric Lady (12/3/2016 2:03:00 AM)


    Aww what a beautiful dedication. I can tell this is straight from the heart. Cheers. (Report) Reply

  • Indira Renganathan (12/3/2016 12:50:00 AM)


    Immense pleasure to see your poem here Ahmad....You are the first one to honour me too dedicating your poemMysterious Depth....You are highly talented....one proof is this poem...repetitive word darling and the icey ending lines make the reader say wow...congratulations on being the poet of the day..... God bless you (Report) Reply

  • (10/16/2009 11:37:00 AM)


    When I commented before, I didn't see my name there..But now after I had seen my name I will say I am really grateful to you. Thank you so so so much for the dedication it's an honour to me..don't deprive us from your natural talent! ! (Report) Reply

  • (5/3/2009 12:07:00 AM)


    wonderful wonderful wonderful (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2009 12:33:00 AM)


    I really enjoyed this piece. (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2009 12:33:00 AM)


    I really enjoyed this piece. (Report) Reply

  • (3/30/2009 5:01:00 AM)


    to you I just a piece of ice, to me ur great poet, i like this express (Report) Reply

  • (3/30/2009 4:17:00 AM)


    Nature is beautiful and it is for us to revere and enjoy! A good write! (Report) Reply

  • (3/27/2009 9:42:00 AM)


    so that i can download them (Report) Reply

  • (3/27/2009 9:41:00 AM)


    please make a pdf (portable document file) of you'r all poems (Report) Reply

  • (3/22/2009 9:41:00 PM)


    This poem is spellbinding. The imagery is simply beautiful and the ice imagery later on speaks such
    cold, sad words. The repetition of 'darling' works so well too! Karin Anderson
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, March 19, 2009

Poem Edited: Saturday, May 16, 2009


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