s./j. goldner

Rookie (March 2nd,1984 / USA)

Pearl Harbor At 64: Haiku - Poem by s./j. goldner

palm crescents yielding
in the zephyred attrition,
answer back—two flaps.


Comments about Pearl Harbor At 64: Haiku by s./j. goldner

  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (5/17/2006 11:23:00 PM)


    SUSAN JANE, , I LIKE THIS PIECE A LOT..HOWEVER, I DON'T KNOW IF YOU
    SYLABYLLED '' PEARL HARBOR'', THE WAY YOU DID BY DESIGN...BUT THIS IS TRUE-LINE HAIKU...COUNT THE SYLLABLE PATTERN.IT'S IN PERFECT SYNC...5-7-5...HAIKU, ESPECIALLY THE MORE CONTEMPORARY, RATHER THAN THE ZEN TRADITIONAL, WHICH LENDS ITSELF IN MAJORITY TO THEMES OF NATURE AND ASIAN INFLUENCE, WHICH IS JUST AS ENJOYABLE & BUT A BIT MORE DIFFICULT TO MASTER.
    ...EITHER WAY, S.J., NICE WRITE..AND A (10) !
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  • (5/11/2006 9:59:00 PM)


    I don't quite agree with Tai, seeing the butterfly (maybe backstroke?) - anyway, I admire economy, since I pinch my pennies and metaphors to my chest. Good job, don't let the minnows annoy you. (Report) Reply

  • (5/8/2006 5:10:00 PM)


    Cryptic SuS's? The two flaps are a trifle dissappointing. Tai, suggesting a re-think (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, May 8, 2006

Poem Edited: Thursday, July 22, 2010


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