satyender saharan

Freshman - 856 Points (02/11/1999 / DELHI)

You The Perfect One - Poem by satyender saharan

Starting from the first,
walking till the last.
i walk alone finding someone,
but sadly ended up fighting with everyone.

thou my love broke me,
thou i still walk alone having no clues
fighting up a battle
what was my fault?

every story has a beautiful start,
but only few reach their heaven
we fought like hell
i cried like hell
you left me into a hell
you broke me into pieces
you kept on breaking

i kept on collecting
even if i combine them
it says 'YOU THE PERFECT ONE'.
and you know what i will wait for
you to say ' I LOVE YOU TOO DUMBO'
or else i will wait forever

Be back to me soon......

Topic(s) of this poem: broken heart

Form: Allegory


Poet's Notes about The Poem

THIS poem is for someone who meant the world me

Comments about You The Perfect One by satyender saharan

  • The Poet Poet (9/21/2017 1:44:00 PM)


    nice compose more read more answer more read my moms smiles poem u will love it (Report) Reply

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  • Hazel Durham (7/31/2016 8:54:00 AM)


    I love this heart-wrenching poem beautifully written the words flow with your deep love wanting your beloved back you express the agony and despair of a broken heart brilliantly! ! (Report) Reply

  • Poornima  Thapa (7/16/2016 1:12:00 PM)


    But only few reach their heaven...quite true...well put across, coming naturally (Report) Reply

  • Queeny Gona (3/31/2016 5:48:00 AM)


    Firstly, I appreciate your poetic talent. More or less, the theme of your write-ups that I have read so far fall on similar lines like Love, betrayal, longing etc.

    You have shown your depth of love in each of your musings in a different perspective. Your commitment over flowed in each of your strokes! keep it up!
    (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr (3/31/2016 12:49:00 AM)


    Feeling, emotion, passion, all wonderfully woven into a poem depicting so wonderfully a broken heart.
    Drink a wonderful sunrise, eat the beauty of the sea or the mountains.
    The huge energy and constructive power of the universe works always towards healing.
    Strength. Keep your poetic talent alive. It is rooted within you!
    (Report) Reply

  • Ging Taping (3/30/2016 11:14:00 PM)


    Oh sad! ..as the saying goes..when you love someone set them free when they come back again then you really meant for each other..for now pick up the broken pieces and start anew..you will find the right one for you who will love you back in return (Report) Reply

  • Anita Khelawan (1/12/2016 10:46:00 PM)


    every story has a beautiful start,
    but only few reach their heaven 
    we fought like hell 
    i cried like hell 
    you left me into a hell 
    you broke me into pieces
    you kept on breaking

    you know what i will wait for
    you to say ' I LOVE YOU TOO DUMBO'
    or else i will wait forever..... these are my favorite lines in yr beautiful poem... they are so simple yet effective and powerful. Thnx for sharing
    (Report) Reply

  • Sahra Hussein (12/5/2015 11:57:00 AM)


    hou my love broke me,
    thou i still walk alone having no clues
    fighting up a battle
    what was my fault?
    it really a full of emotions
    good one!
    (Report) Reply

  • Dr.tony Brahmin (12/5/2015 11:43:00 AM)


    i cried like hell
    you left me into a hell
    you broke me into pieces
    you kept on breaking. great expressions of love and distress and hope in seeming hopelessness. thank you dear poet. tony
    (Report) Reply

  • (11/27/2015 7:40:00 AM)


    An expressive and a meaningful write. (Report) Reply

  • Anitah Muwanguzi (11/20/2015 5:03:00 AM)


    i walk alone finding someone,
    but sadly ended up fighting with everyone.

    Deep, heart wrenching piece, hope it gave you the solace only writing poetry can give
    (Report) Reply

  • Bakuli Bhakali (11/12/2015 10:19:00 AM)


    beautifully articulated...
    but you shouldn't waste your time waiting for someone who was never yours...
    cheer up and move on.....
    there's wonder in future...
    explore it
    (Report) Reply

  • Seema Jayaraman (11/9/2015 11:43:00 AM)


    I agree with Melvina, life is not meant to wait in a deep cave waiting for someone to recognize your feelings or potential.. especially at a very young age. Life is to live it up, live it out and make life a happy more livable experience that others can emulate.. good work.. deeply felt musings though, keep writing. thanks. (Report) Reply

  • Melvina Germain (11/9/2015 11:26:00 AM)


    Wow! sounds like someone who is totally dependent on this one person who is not in the same emotional flow. If this poor person uses up their life waiting for someone who has moved on, well that creates a long life of sadness where one grows old alone. No I would not like to see this person in the poem use up their life in such a way. Once again, take the good memories and find someone to share a beautiful life with you, someone who will love you to the death...I enjoy reading poems that create a great deal of thought in me and matters of the heart are my forte...Great work, keep writing and sharing your heart with the world, we need you..... (Report) Reply

    Bharati Nayak Bharati Nayak (1/23/2016 5:40:00 AM)

    Melvina, I too agree with you.Love is wonderful.But it is not worth waiting if someone left for ever.
    But the poem is heart touching showing earnestness.! 0 - - -for the poem.

  • Souren Mondal (11/4/2015 7:03:00 AM)


    'every story has a beautiful start,
    but only few reach their heaven
    we fought like hell
    i cried like hell
    you left me into a hell
    you broke me into pieces'


    Unfortunately those lines do hold a lot of truth.. A nice write 'droken'...
    (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (11/3/2015 3:13:00 AM)


    Continue to wait patiently...... one day the one who matters most in your life will listen to your earnest plea and come back to you! Nice poem Droken! (Report) Reply

    Satyender Saharan Satyender Saharan (11/4/2015 1:33:00 AM)

    thank you so much

  • Ramesh T A (11/2/2015 10:13:00 PM)


    Love is also a waiting business indeed! Nice one! (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (10/31/2015 10:27:00 PM)


    Deeply envisioned and aptly depicted.Emotional expression with best phrasology. Beautiful poem.Many thanks dear Droken, keep the ball rolling. - - - - 10 (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (10/31/2015 2:41:00 PM)


    True love is the key about life! Nice work. Keep in writing. (Report) Reply

  • Kinyua Karanja (10/30/2015 6:52:00 AM)


    A romantic poem with nostalgic memories of hijinks and a dose a of melancholic and dejection feelings of love going haywire. Nice job done, Best of luck in your writing. (Report) Reply

    Satyender Saharan Satyender Saharan (11/4/2015 1:33:00 AM)

    thank you

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, October 28, 2015

Poem Edited: Friday, October 30, 2015


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