Loke Kok yee


All In Vain - Poem by Loke Kok yee

A passing crow forebodingly black
On a gravestone sat and loudly chacked
Lorded it over the peaceful site
Which belied the tales of death and fright
And pondered upon the rows of stone
What creatures would, such abode to own

A soldier killed in a foreign land
Long forgotten, buried in the sand
A life given afore it was due
A loved one lost without an adieu
Now grime befouled what's left of his name
With just a shadow left to be claimed

The battle hidden in books unread
For history felt not, all the blood shed
The battles fought for glory to gain
Was shown by time to be all in vain
Yet wars persist with its deadly toll
As differing views fought to control

Topic(s) of this poem: war


Comments about All In Vain by Loke Kok yee

  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/28/2019 2:50:00 PM)

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    i'm sure both sides sometimes have some feelings of 'lack of success' after a battle, if no one side 'wins'. but at least no one 'loses' either. other times there is a winner and so the battle, though 'costly' in lives etc. may be said to be NOT in vain (for the winner) .

    i object to war, but i will not say that wars should never be fought. it MAY be worse to NOT fight, though i would want it to be my choice to fight or not.

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/28/2019 2:49:00 PM)

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    i can't back it up with statistics, but i'll bet battles of 'modern times' are rarely fought (only) for glory, though some few may derive fame from their participation.

    and many battles are NOT in vain, at least not for a winning side.

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/28/2019 2:47:00 PM)

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    hereabouts i'd call it a Raven, as in The Raven.

    i like some of the rhyming. to me, the first stanza does not have to lead to the 2nd & 3rd, unless perhaps it's a military cemetery.

    " Vain. This is an adjective which means 'not achieving the desired outcome', 'futile', 'unsuccessful', 'lacking substance or worth', 'hollow' and 'fruitless'."


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  • Tom Allport (10/10/2018 5:42:00 PM)

    A powerful write about the futility of war? ......well penned Loke (Report)Reply

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (5/7/2018 7:52:00 AM)

    Wars are the greatest affront to our race....! How much of blood is shed to ascertain victory..... but all in vain! The victims of war and the soldiers who fought in the battlefield are soon forgotten and the progeny may not know for what and by whom the war was fought....! Loved ones are lost without even an adieu......! How true.....! I am touched by this write, Loke! A 10 (Report)Reply

    Loke Kok Yee(5/12/2018 4:03:00 AM)

    Tank you Valsa, indeed; war is senseless.

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  • Kelly KurtKelly Kurt (4/29/2018 7:12:00 PM)

    We outnumber the warmongers. Unless that power is applied somehow; yes, the extinction of our species. (Report)Reply

    Loke Kok Yee(5/1/2018 1:19:00 AM)

    But they are holding the guns! ! ! Thanks Kelly

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  • Mj Lemon (4/29/2018 5:44:00 PM)

    Nameless here for evermore... There is a slice of Poe in this raven-of-war, Loke. Masterfully done! (Report)Reply

    Loke Kok Yee(5/1/2018 1:18:00 AM)

    Thank you Mj, how I wish that there is a slice of Poe in me. Ho! Ho! Ho!

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (4/28/2018 11:12:00 PM)

    Long forgotten memory is buried in the sand. The battle hidden in books is unread. War always provokes thought and history of war brings sadness. This poem is amazingly drafted and shared...10 (Report)Reply

    loke kok yee(5/1/2018 1:12:00 AM)

    Thank you my friend, war is indeed one of our greatest failing.

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  • Akhtar JawadAkhtar Jawad (4/28/2018 6:36:00 AM)

    War is a futile effort to defeat the enemy, to win an enemy win his heart and make him a friend. (Report)Reply

    loke kok yee(4/29/2018 11:20:00 AM)

    Your wisdom shines through in your comment, thank you sir.

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  • Kelly KurtKelly Kurt (4/27/2018 9:53:00 AM)

    We, as a species have not learned from our mistakes. There are no winners in war. (Report)Reply

    loke kok yee(4/29/2018 11:19:00 AM)

    Very true my friend and it may, one day lead to the extinction of the species?

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Poem Submitted: Friday, April 27, 2018

Poem Edited: Monday, November 4, 2019


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