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And I Chose This Path

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Walking through the lone aisle
I got time to review myself
When everyone around judged me unjust
Was it true, or my choice was best.

Often we come across in life
Where the crowd around hate you
Because you didn't do what they phew
Only because deep inside you light renew.

Walking in the light of insight
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And I Chose This Path
Tuesday, May 26, 2020
Topic(s) of this poem: challenges,inspirational,lonely,path
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
I saw this photo and thought to write a poem where we chose a path. Often it seems we are a failure and is looking our hope. But those who keep moving even after all the heart broken comments and judgements will see the light and know the pleasure to acquire the impossible.
Photo by Mael BALLAND on unsplash.
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Khairul Ahsan 10 June 2020

Thank you Varsha, for taking my critique in good grace. Appreciate your broad and positive outlook.

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Khairul Ahsan 09 June 2020

The general theme of the poem is inspiring but the poet may be well advised to abandon her efforts to make the lines rhyme or sound so, without making much sense. Example: 'Because you didn't do what they phew Only because deep inside you light renew'. If the lines rhyme naturally, that's well and good, but there is no need to labor hard to do that.

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Varsha M 09 June 2020

Thank-you sir for your explicit expression. I agree the rhyming was intentional. I remembered one of my school days poetry where the poet omitted last letter to rhyme. I just trued one. Will definitely take care not to do intentional rhyming.

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Chuy Amante 01 June 2020

the inner guru and then arriving just on time you sound like a longtime traveler of life, congratulations!

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A well composed inspiring poem.....10++

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