Aditi Khandelwal

Rookie - 1 Points (December 27 1997)

My Single Poppy - Poem by Aditi Khandelwal

A single swaying poppy in the garden
Now even the falling leaves are a burden
The bees are nearby buzzing
Draining its life, like hot blood slushing

All the bright flowers are falling
Bowed to the bad storm's calling.
In the middle of nowhere, like a lost sailor,
My once sweet poppy is growing paler and paler.

Neither water nor manure brings change,
Saving the poppy is now out of my range.
Once so near to the other flowers
Is so far, like the Satan and the beautiful stars.

Swaying with the dangerous storms,
Is how my poppy now mourns.
Pouring down with the rain torrential
Is what now it finds conventional.

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Here poppy refers to one of my friend who used to be pretty good and now we are not friends because he has gone to the storm's side that is the not so good side according to me....
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Comments about My Single Poppy by Aditi Khandelwal

  • (1/21/2014 8:51:00 AM)

    Great use of imagery in first vtwo stanzas.

    paler and paler
    Maybe you can replace these words with something else. They aren't as poetic.
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  • Valerie Dohren (7/27/2012 12:40:00 PM)

    Beautiful poem, very inspired and imaginative write. (Report) Reply

  • Koena Mokoena (4/30/2012 3:42:00 AM)

    It sounds like you must be brave in order for us to have a brighter future. Hence, i read your poem & i think you are one of those girls who are passionate about their heritage. (Report) Reply

  • (4/26/2012 9:17:00 PM)

    you've done an impressive job, a very good write aditi. Kudos (Report) Reply

  • Sharad Juneja (4/22/2012 8:21:00 AM)

    Very beautiful.......what i liked the that u care for him........ forgive himif he has done wrong.. becoz friendship has no purpose............. very beautifully expressed (Report) Reply

  • (4/22/2012 12:46:00 AM)

    Aditi, Luckily, you have written that poppy is the name of your friend. I hope and pray that you friend is not involved with other poppy....though the symptoms are similar! ! (Report) Reply

  • Wabi Sabi (4/21/2012 4:56:00 AM)

    there must be many kinds you wouldn't know. your friennd has chosen one of them. you have et him free.that is a grand decision. then what would happen.... life would leave you two meet getting together sometime, talking about it, laughing. I always believe so whenever something like that happens to me. well written! ! (Report) Reply

  • Claudia Krizay (4/21/2012 4:54:00 AM)

    VERY lovely poem! And very unique- loved it- (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 21, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, April 21, 2012

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