satyender saharan

Freshman - 873 Points (02/11/1999 / DELHI)

What Was My Fault - Poem by satyender saharan

Walking alone i feel,
As if i could have done more.

I walked along with you,
Not a mere shadow can touch you.

Protected you like my queen,
Loved you as my life,
Helped you as best buddy,
And in return i find endless tears of mine.

I might have bought world under your foot
Never asked you the reason,
Your wish and my command.
But today i ask what was my FAULT?
What was my fault?

Topic(s) of this poem: broken heart, lonely, love

Form: Ars Poetica

Comments about What Was My Fault by satyender saharan

  • Kinyua Karanja (10/6/2017 8:26:00 AM)

    I believe all classic poem have a feeling arousing characteristic, I like it since it touches on it. Very nice piece, keep writing. (Report) Reply

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  • Kinyua Karanja (10/6/2017 8:21:00 AM)

    I believe all classic poem have a feelings arousing characteristics as this one does. I like it, it's a nice piece. Keep writing. (Report) Reply

  • Kinyua Karanja (10/6/2017 8:16:00 AM)

    I believe all classic poem have a feeling arousing characteristic, I like it since it touches on it. Very nice, keep writing. (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (7/31/2016 9:04:00 AM)

    A heartfelt write asking the questions that remain unanswered, you did everything you could but you should not blame yourself. You should be so proud of yourself as you are a young man with so much to give to the right girl! (Report) Reply

  • Rajnish Manga (7/15/2016 11:39:00 AM)

    This is extremely painful for a promising relationship in the making to disintegrate leaving a irksome question unanswered. Thanks. I quote:
    Protected you like my queen / Loved you as my life / And in return i find endless tears of mine / What was my fault?
    (Report) Reply

  • Jr Cuyam (3/30/2016 11:11:00 PM)

    It is both happy and painful to love. nicely expressed piece. (Report) Reply

  • Jez Brul (3/30/2016 12:26:00 PM)

    Your only fault is loving too much... (Report) Reply

  • Anita Khelawan (1/12/2016 10:59:00 PM)

    Firstly...this poem was amazing.. Being in love myself... I can truly appreciate your writings... wish God's love and blessings. Most importantly endless happiness... keep writing I look forward to reading more it. Thnx 4 sharing (Report) Reply

  • Gayathri Ramasubramanian (12/11/2015 8:21:00 AM)

    a nice poem...thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

  • (11/16/2015 2:56:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem with so much individual feelings. (Report) Reply

  • Melvina Germain (11/9/2015 11:17:00 AM)

    Great deal of pain penetrated here and that line of questioning is always on the plate when one wonder why the one they loved left them. Awww sucha shame in fact but we need to know in this life that everything changes and we take the good from that bad situation and we use it as amazing memories and never look at the one love in a dark light but choose to remember the light we found in the first place. Life changes and some people fall out of love for whatever reason, let them go and move forward. Thank you again for sharing a real life situation in poetry..... (Report) Reply

  • Nosheen Irfan (11/9/2015 2:45:00 AM)

    Nice poem. Captures the pain of loving and losing beautifully. (Report) Reply

  • Souren Mondal (11/4/2015 6:59:00 AM)

    A situation we often find ourselves in as Fabrizio below mentioned.. A nice read...


    P: S: I assume you capitalised 'MY' to put emphasise on it, I guess. But I agree with Kelly below, you can simply capitalise 'FAULT' - the verb - and it would do the job...

    Cheers mate! ;)
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    Satyender Saharan (11/4/2015 8:47:00 AM)

    thank you so much sir

  • Fabrizio Frosini (11/4/2015 6:03:00 AM)

    '' What was my fault? ''

    an emotional write, and a question many of us have asked ourselves many times..
    Keep on writing, 'droken'
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  • Michael Mcparland (11/4/2015 3:21:00 AM)

    A very well done and emotionally painful poem to read. Very good poem. (Report) Reply

    Satyender Saharan (11/4/2015 3:48:00 AM)

    thank you sir

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (10/31/2015 11:19:00 PM)

    Helped you as best buddy,
    And in return i find endless tears of mine.- - - - yes, best friend often gets endless tears in return of help, don't bother, where true love is. Well expression. Lovely poem. Thanks for sharing. - - -10
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    Satyender Saharan (11/1/2015 9:42:00 AM)

    thank you sir..!

  • Kelly Kurt (10/31/2015 1:44:00 PM)

    A nicely written poem, Droken. My only suggestion would be not to capitalize the words; was my (Report) Reply

    Satyender Saharan (10/31/2015 9:11:00 PM)

    thank you so much sir.

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Poem Submitted: Friday, October 30, 2015

Poem Edited: Wednesday, November 4, 2015

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