s./j. goldner

Rookie (March 2nd,1984 / USA)

A Rose In Birth - Poem by s./j. goldner

I'm a disgrace to the life
I lived as a girl—
she would be ashamed
to have me in the world.

But there's no turning back;
it's time to pay the price
for selfish pride
and evil vice.

Or pack up my things
and leave this great earth—
would you put in place
a rose in birth.

Cause thorns I've got
it's the petals I lack;
beauty should unfold:
this is no unknown fact.

With this request I must be going—
please all take care,
boys and girls
handsome and fair.


Comments about A Rose In Birth by s./j. goldner

  • Indira Renganathan (1/31/2009 7:21:00 AM)


    Or pack up my things
    and leave this great earth—
    would you put in place
    a rose in birth....When a daughter says so... kindly understand the mother's feeling...and the mother continues to say 'do away the evil using the thorns.. for a rose is blessed with thorns to protect itself..great poem10
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  • Ashraful Musaddeq (9/10/2008 2:28:00 AM)


    Added 10 to this wonderful poem with pleasure. (Report) Reply

  • (3/14/2008 7:40:00 AM)


    I'm sorry, I'm not sure if I really understand the end of it. The beginning is beautiful though. I love it. (Report) Reply

  • (2/26/2008 9:03:00 PM)


    A very insightful poem, now I am eager to read more of your work.
    May I say that, no matter who we were yesterday or what pains we have had along the way to now, tomorrow is an ever drawing beacon that offers sweet chances to renew, tho we may not go back to life as it was. I feel this poem deeply. Thank you!
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  • (1/31/2008 1:40:00 PM)


    UM...um...More pratice, maybe? (Report) Reply

  • (1/16/2008 3:11:00 PM)


    This is totally relatable. If only we were able to keep the optimism and pristine versions of ourselves alive through the thicket of maturity. The thorns leave a mark, don't they? (Report) Reply

  • (11/13/2007 5:06:00 AM)


    goldy locks
    nothing shocks
    your life shadow boxs
    your inner demons detox
    yes you and your poetry rocks
    the ghost who walks takes stock
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  • (11/2/2007 7:37:00 AM)


    Is it that? Damn, that is strong. Unrivaled finesse at exploring the images of your soul. am amazed. (Report) Reply

  • Satish Verma (10/30/2007 11:13:00 AM)


    Your integrity astonishes me.So much hurt in a young heart. (Report) Reply

  • (9/17/2007 5:01:00 PM)


    This is deep and strong I like it (Report) Reply

  • (9/12/2007 7:05:00 PM)


    Lol, its funny, i wrote this as a comment to another person just before i read your poem. It fits in so perfectly to yours tho, so i will repost it to you too...

    I love when poets compare love or people to roses, ... I feel that as roses are plants they spawn out of the ground of grime and soil and form as something so beautiful... yet as they are from such dirty upbringings, there are thorns that protect it/them.

    You have wonderful ability to touch souls with words, i thank you ~Manny
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  • (9/12/2007 7:35:00 AM)


    would you put in place
    Very easy to read. The rhymes are so smooth and familiar fitting right in. The images are familiar too and your point of view is imaginative and insightful. I like this part the best.

    a rose in birth.

    Cause thorns I've got
    it's the petals I lack;
    beauty should unfold:
    this is no unknown fact.
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  • (4/28/2007 10:29:00 AM)


    Your in a league of your own. Mozart, smooth legato...... (Report) Reply

  • Jeanette Krantz (4/26/2007 1:51:00 PM)


    ooh i really like this one (Report) Reply

  • (3/8/2007 5:37:00 AM)


    nice poem....i enjoyed it...sometimes our feeling is like this...well expressed (Report) Reply

  • (1/10/2007 12:03:00 PM)


    Two different worlds though Susan. Once you've bitten into the apple there's no going back. And there are compensations for the losses. Redemption (not of the religious kind) is always an option of sorts in the search for balance. Or you could continue writing searingly honest soul-searching poetry of this very fine quality. jim (Report) Reply

  • (12/5/2006 9:34:00 PM)


    A very fragile and beautiful poem. You put yout soul into this one. Write on, Susan.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra
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  • Brian Dorn (11/14/2006 1:05:00 PM)


    Thorny write, Sus... but worth every prick. Great stuff.
    Brian
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  • john tiong chunghoo (9/20/2006 8:54:00 AM)


    an elegance not many have. (Report) Reply

  • (7/30/2006 12:38:00 PM)


    This surely is praiseworthy.... I vote 10/10. I will have to take some leisure time to read all yoour poems... you have a style. I do have one on ROSE (goes with this title) ... its'a bonzai. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, May 3, 2006

Poem Edited: Friday, June 9, 2006


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