Adam McKim

Rookie - 222 Points (11/12/1984)

Our First Date (Tri-Fall) - Poem by Adam McKim

The silence around us
as we see
the stars shooting across the skies...
From this beautiful grus
above me
the stars reflect into your eyes

The moonlight shines on you
in this night
bringing out your amazing smile...
And when the morning dew
comes in sight
our night together was worthwhile

This night was our first date
only us
I'll never forget holding you...
And as we accept fate
with a buss
the start of new love as sparks flew


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This is my first Tri-fall poem and it was a tough one. The rhyme scheme is abc-abc and the meter is 6/3/8-6/3/8.

Comments about Our First Date (Tri-Fall) by Adam McKim

  • (8/12/2012 5:30:00 AM)


    Really great work, a fantastic poem. (Report) Reply

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  • Ellias Anderson Jr. (8/12/2012 4:43:00 AM)


    Dear Adam, the words those have been used here show that you have used your natural feelings to write down this poem. The poems those are written in this way are so charmer and good. I enjoy reading this work. Some words have a glamour and mystery feelings with themselves. You used them in their right place!
    Good job man!
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  • Tiana Webb (8/12/2012 1:42:00 AM)


    Wow another amazing poem. This one is beautiful and it's still got rhyme : D
    You are a truly inspirational poet. It's like you can write anything with the simplest of ease. Well done : D
    Tiana xx
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  • (8/11/2012 1:22:00 AM)


    Wow, Adam, you did do it again...you did really well on it! You continue to inspire me. Thanks for sharing :) (Report) Reply

  • John Hayes (8/10/2012 8:08:00 AM)


    And as we accept fate
    with a buss
    the start of new love as sparks flew

    I like this poem, especially these lines...
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Poem Submitted: Friday, August 10, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 1, 2012


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